Hey, folks! Make sure when you are commenting on others' haikus that you double-check and comment on the following when necessary: spelling syllable count
Remember: first line = 5 syllables second line = 7 syllables third line = 5 syllables
it was so peacefull untill the sound of nature came bursting into life. it was silent then the the woodpecker started up the forest of life. then i saw a few birds,butterflies, and a ground hog.so when you pay attentoin to detail you will find or hear something interesting
I am in the tent
ReplyDeleteI am sleeping peacfully
the bear came, it's over
Brody
Tornados
ReplyDeletetornados are cool
they swirl and swirl and swirl, but
they are dangerous
joshua
Hockey kids are tough.
ReplyDeleteThey lose teeth, get cut open.
Hockey is my life.
Tory
It keeps builing up
ReplyDeleteThis same old pain never stops.
When will we go back?
Go back to the things
that were known as you and me?
Is this our new lives?
You always told me
that this love would never end.
Did you know it would?
Maybe "always" was
your final lie. And love was
just my hopeless cry.
-Keely
It is cold outside
ReplyDeleteBut then the sun comes again
I start to smile
~Kaycee~
Trees, the gentlest
ReplyDeleteSwaying in the soft wind
Leaves changing with seasons
-Jas
sonw falling every
ReplyDeletewere, so white and soft and cold
so cold pleas dont leave.
Andy
They said it was true
ReplyDeletethe breakdown was comming fast
School is just starting
i'll always be here
as your friend to back you up
It fourth hour now
cries behind a door
i found you in the bathroom
you tell me to leave
crowds start to aappear
everyone is watching now
to see the breakdown
Tessa:)
Nothing
ReplyDeleteAlone, by myself
Lost in a world of nothing
Searching my way out
The darkness surrounds
Smothered, Scared, need to be free
Still searching alone
Nothing, horrified
Is this all I get, darkness
Nothing but Nothing
Now I realize
The out is in me, and I
have nothing to find
-Melissa
A friend should be nice
ReplyDeletea friend should always be there
a friend should be true
Joe
Hey, folks! Make sure when you are commenting on others' haikus that you double-check and comment on the following when necessary:
ReplyDeletespelling
syllable count
Remember: first line = 5 syllables
second line = 7 syllables
third line = 5 syllables
Some haikus are weird
ReplyDeleteA lot did not make sence too
Refridgarator
-Carson
I'll call you tonight
ReplyDeleteaffraid of what you will say
I may hesitate
will you ask again
please dont , i fear it will happen
can i still say no
i doubt myself now
your calling me, help im scarred
yet i still answer
you ask once again
youve tricked me, now i said yes
are you satisfied
~Allison
will you talk to me
ReplyDeletelet me say whats on my mind
im down on my knees
im begging you please
explain to me what i did
im so confused now
at a loss of words
you will look at me and say
everything is fine
i can see through you
you mad at me once again
so nothing is fine
~Allison
As we walk down this path
ReplyDeletehear the waves upon the sand
see the stars shine down
as we walk away
we leave behind memories
we must say good-bye
we may come back soon
i fear it may not be true
living without you
you seem so close by
though silence seperates us
where did it all go
~Allison
Andy you spelt pleasE wrong and all syables are in it yay! :) Keely yours is really good i like it
ReplyDeleteTessa:)
Age is just a number.
ReplyDeleteFirst it was teasing
Then suddenly it was more,
I didn't want that
Now thats all I want
Age is just a number, right?
Its not meant to be.
-Cheyanne :D
Allison I really like yours. There so deep :)
ReplyDelete-Cheyanne
Perfect pink petal
ReplyDeletePressed between leaves of a book
Immortal beauty
-- Mrs. Carr
To want love forever.
ReplyDeleteStarts with being true to me.
Then love will find me.
-Kaitlin
Kids who write poems,
ReplyDeleteTheir words and meanings tumbling,
Nourish heart and soul!
--Mrs. C
Seagulls scream outloud,
ReplyDeleteEndless waves crash along the shore,
Always moving sea.
-Megan
keely yours was like a poem and it had good use of the words and syllabals
ReplyDeletezack
andy yours was cool and probably about snowboarding but you spelt snow wrong
ReplyDeletezack
I saw a flower,
ReplyDeleteIt reminded me of you,
I killed the flower.
-Jenn :-)
allison,
ReplyDeleteyours are so deep it seems to me like its comeing right from the heart this is wut poems are about =]
~Kaycee~
one day at the race
ReplyDeletei hit a jump and i fell
and i broke my arm and leg
zack
it was so peacefull untill
ReplyDeletethe sound of nature came
bursting into life.
it was silent then the
the woodpecker started up
the forest of life. then i saw a few birds,butterflies,
and a ground hog.so when you pay attentoin to detail you
will find or hear something interesting
zack